smell
from an old snow -
bird whistling
I did not like the word "smell". Scent? Stink? What aroma snow's got? Then #2:
old snow
ebbing away -
a black bird!
The train was late. I checked the time and got slightly nervous. When arrived at Helsinki main railway station our train was 7 minutes late! When returning later back to Turku I wrote #3:
this year
melting snows seemingly
missing the train
When I was back at home again I was not at all worried how to make yourself clear in haiku-writing.
The black bird? - Perhaps just a rapid shadow?
3 comments:
Maybe
the faint smell
of old snow –
bird whistling
Good work.
I like them all, Tikkis!
To them, I add a silly mis-guided view
the train
misses the black bird
sour snow. _m
Bill:
Just perfect! Thank you.
Magyar :-)
So humanly
aged snowfields
as for ever
(As told in Polona's I am just now passing my 66.6 birthday! - Survived?)
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